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wasnt a bad story but the characters needed more content... they themselves need description...
all i got from that is some white chick driving a jeep down the wangan gets passed by some white guy driving a black fd they meet at mcd's and she gets a ride from him and thats pretty much it...
what color were his/hers eyes? hair? skin? was he dirty from wrenching or wearing a suit from the office... what about her...
the use of japanese was atrocious... but most of all
SPELL CHECK <----- use it next time... screa and tpe are not words so a spell checker would catch these mistakes immediately... but then again you are the "imfamous" CDGuy so its excuseable...
while you are on the right track... this kind of story needs more fleshing out, take your time and read things over 10times before you submit a final copy...
the 2nd story was better... but again could use some refinement so it flows better... as well as use a better vocabulary... words like "grody" deminish the quality of the read...
keep it up though... in a few years you should be able to produce something a publishing company might actually print
How many kids with A.D.D. does it take to screw in a light bulb?
Seriously Ryan... Coming from you? You and your car is the laughing stock of GTRC West.
CDGuy I think I figured it out. Escaping to GTRC is your fantasy land where you own a GTR. Your writing is another fantasy land where you drive a black FD and pick up chicks in Japan. And for someone who has supposedly traveled Japan a couple times, I'm surprised you didn't know there was an ocean between Japan and Hong Kong. Or that Daikoku Futo is a rest stop, and Jeeps there wouldn't be out of the ordinary.
I'm sorry... but all these contradictions make me call...
BULLSH*T
DISCLAIMER: If any of the above comments in this post hurt your feelings you are likely taking me too seriously; I'm probably just busting your balls. If you're unsure, feel free to PM me and we can discuss the matter privately, as to not pull the thread OT.
That's only because you've never met CDGuy... I have.
DISCLAIMER: If any of the above comments in this post hurt your feelings you are likely taking me too seriously; I'm probably just busting your balls. If you're unsure, feel free to PM me and we can discuss the matter privately, as to not pull the thread OT.
That's only because you've never met CDGuy... I have.
No you haven't.
...
And, yeah, alot of mistakes, kind of deliberate. I'm not very good at speaking Japanese, I should know better. According to a Japanese friend, Domo Domo means whats up whats up!!
Also, I know about the vast amount of ocean in between the two countries (or city for HK). The joke about "race" was simply an inside joke between a friend and I. In fact the whole story is in reference to a girlfriend, from HK, who drives a Jeep. I'm supposed to be the white guy in the FD, and she's supposed to be the Chinese girl in the Jeep.
You know, I was a little nervous to post this here, and until a few days ago it was a lifeless thread.
I guess someone saw it, and had to get on the bash CDGuy bandwagon. Thanks to the few who knew that the writing isn't professional, it's just for fun.
Might I also add:
"GTRC OT Pit (- Viewing)
Got something to say thats *not* related to Skylines or the GT-R? Have your say here. This forum is for discussion only, not for flame wars."
No offense man, but what did you really expect? A lot of the members here tend to make fun of you every chance they get (I still don't quite understand why... or how it all started, there are tons of other members here I would make fun of for various reasons over you .. )... You should have known that posting something semi-personal like this would garner some negative comments.
It's true. And you know it. It's been down for how long now? Always seems to be something new... I think you've driven that thing as long as I had my FD on the road which is kind of sad considering it's not a rotary.
And, yeah, alot of mistakes, kind of deliberate. I'm not very good at speaking Japanese, I should know better. According to a Japanese friend, Domo Domo means whats up whats up!!
Also, I know about the vast amount of ocean in between the two countries (or city for HK). The joke about "race" was simply an inside joke between a friend and I. In fact the whole story is in reference to a girlfriend, from HK, who drives a Jeep. I'm supposed to be the white guy in the FD, and she's supposed to be the Chinese girl in the Jeep.
You know, I was a little nervous to post this here, and until a few days ago it was a lifeless thread.
I guess someone saw it, and had to get on the bash CDGuy bandwagon. Thanks to the few who knew that the writing isn't professional, it's just for fun.
Might I also add:
"GTRC OT Pit (- Viewing)
Got something to say thats *not* related to Skylines or the GT-R? Have your say here. This forum is for discussion only, not for flame wars."
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